This blog picks up from my previous post The Long and the Short of GDS in Year 6 Writing. In that earlier post I set out the rationale for a series of related blogs across the next year, and explained the “long and the short” of the title.  This  blog focuses on the short term.  It is a blog simply concerned with offering support for final writing opportunities before the teacher assessment window closes.

The grid below hopefully clarifies the distinction I am drawing between these short and the long term views. If you just want to crack on with this particular post’s year 6 advice – because time is short – just scroll past the grid without a shred of guilt in your heart.
 

The long and the short of GDS

A quick recap

Last time around, we looked at each of the bullet points from the 2017-18 Teacher Assessment Framework (please note: the TAF, no longer the ITAF).  In the course of doing so, one emerging theme that came through was the influence of personal reading in the children’s writing.  I made the point that this doesn’t mean parading overt influences, and it certainly wouldn’t mean parroting a text (unless we are quoting, say, or mimicking some phrasing for devastatingly clever, satirical effect - quite a risky task in itself).

What it really means is that in the course of reading the child’s evidence bank, we should have a sense that they have been reading a range of what might be termed (and debated no doubt) “age appropriate + books”.  Put it this way, I love Don’t Let the Pigeon Drive the Bus with all my heart, but its influence is unlikely to bunk us up and over the EXS/GDS trellising.

By 'reading that informs writing', we mean understanding the text, absorbing its mode and message, getting a feel for the rhythms and patterns of writing in its many forms and from this, accepting and rejecting stylistic turns, language features, and punctuation quirks.  This process, this evolution of the young writer, happens bit by bit, and is in many ways invisible to the human eye, just like physical growth, as they develop that thing called “voice”.

That voice will change or vary; in terms of statutory assessment, it has to as the requirements around formality expect children to manage the formality level that they have adopted consistently.  The formality level needs to reflect the purpose of the given stretch/piece of writing.  Remember though, the requirement to shift about in formality within a piece has been sensibly put to sleep – you can shift about if you’re that way  inclined, or the text warrants it, but the measure now is purpose and control.  If it needs to be formal throughout, then keep an eye on those inappropriate slips. 

Furthermore, if you consider the slips in GDS pieces C and D of the moderator training materials (published in NCA tools and currently on Michael Tidd's blog, under KS2 teacher assessment moderation pack 1), you will have a good idea of what to look for. 

A closing tip for this section: formality does not tend to trip off most people’s tongues.  Reading. Rehearsing.  Modelling. Repetition.  That will help.  Providing speaking frames for unfamiliar or complex constructions can be hugely powerful, especially if backed up with some light touch discrete sentence practice. Choosing a form and context that does not overload your children so that they can focus on careful drafting and meticulous editing will also help.

Just right reading 

I have a conundrum when it comes to GDS.  I am glad it acknowledges the long-term commitments of the avid readers and most writerly writers in our midst.  This commitment to the life of the reading mind is not always fully recognised. What, though, of those that do not devour books at a rate of knots? What of our less keen - or perhaps less attentive reader?  For them we may need to look at what seems like a shortcut: we may need to arrange a literary fuel injection.   How do we do this without feeling as if we are cramming or hot-housing simply for the sake of SATs and stats? Simple. If we are short of time, we shorten the reads. This might, for now,  be a short blast in the run up to this year's assessment deadline, but equally the provision of high quality, but shorter texts will likely have benefits for certain types of readers across the years, across the phase. 

I love books.  They sort of rule my life.  Anyone that has followed me on Twitter or spoken with me at an event will know this to be true.  Still, I have no qualms in pointing you to high quality collections of short stories. We often talk of reading stamina, and how this feeds into achievement, and springs forth from fluency.  All true.  Children need to read books.  However, short stories (not to mention poetry) have their place too, and equally - possibly more effectively - develop fluency and stamina, when chosen well.  They provide a more singular, contained, and complete reading experience, and the effect may well be profound in terms of developing a child's sense of narrative structures, and to allow the reader to really feel the fullest effect of a narrative's closing moments. Try reading a short story that does not end happily, or isn't wrapped up neatly or justly, to your class.  You will likely get some collective insight into what we really mean by effect on readers from just such a session: powerful learning right there in a contained, shared moment.

A story that subtly makes use of  figurative language and stylistic features (anaphora, single line paragraphs at pivotal moments, a well placed, unobtrusive flashback, for example) can influence writing without you highlighting it.  Carve out space for your reader-writers to read/mull/absorb and you will see the benefits in due course.  This does not all have to happen within the confines of the classroom and amidst the pressures of the timetable.  Reading a powerful, thought-provoking story at home will likely go down far better than usual home-reading routines for our more reluctant readers. I'll be returning to reading cultures in the longer term view blogs.

Done well, short stories are a precise art form, just like poetry, and they are perfect when time is short.  I think they have a major, sometimes  underdeveloped, part to play in schools.  I also think that they need to be a little more carefully distributed too - I have heard Stone Soup just  a few too many times in my time as a teacher and I know some of my children have. The range out there is too rich to limit the diet so.  To help in this regard, I have written a supplementary blog, that sets out the substantial benefits and provides a list of some hugely exciting, enriching titles. 

My personal favourites from the list for Year 6 would include Uncle Montague's Tales of Terror, as it draws upon the masterly work of my beloved M R James.  More on this in the following section.     Another favourite is the fantastically Irish-and-proud Once Upon a Place. A great range of authors and the wonderful illustrator P J Lynch cover a range of story types.   I would make particular mention of the story Number 13 and if you want a great way to get children desperate to read this pretty scary story, just send me an e mail using the address at the foot of this blog. I am keeping this particular lesson idea mysterious, just like this brilliant story.  I am also legally obliged to mention Bradbury’s All summer in a Day, too,  at this point, but I have said enough on that gem in the past. 

If fiction does not cut it with your particular aspiring GDS achiever, look to the reliably great The Week Junior for high quality articles and features on a diverse range of topics, but of a consistently high quality.  I would also highly recommend the gripping Survivors by David Long and Kerry Hyndman. Any book that opens with someone falling out of a plane, as it crosses the Amazon, gets my hearty vote.  It really does go down a storm in class.   Then there are short-form biographies, but more on those shortly. Survivors also supports recount writing, which brings me ever so neatly to the next section.

Moving on: narrative writing

As well as directing our energies to shorter form writing in the coming weeks, we might also consider reducing overload by focusing on developing strengths in a more focused body of writing. In previous years, the ITAFs had a built in requirement that a short story formed a part of submitted evidence banks.  This no longer applies.  We now have references to ‘narratives’ in both the WTS and EXS standards (as exemplified here in the EXS statements):

• in narratives, describe settings, characters and atmosphere
• integrate dialogue in narratives to convey character and advance the action

‘Narratives’ refers to both fiction and non-fiction and, to my mind, recounts generally represent a worthwhile investment of the remaining time.  Recounts cover a range of text types: reports; diaries, biographies and autobiographies.  My first piece of advice in terms of making best use of time is to bring recounts into the mix of the fiction work that you undertake. Let’s say we have used guided reading time to look at the first, and highly effective, chapter of Uncle Montague’s Tales of Terror.Classic recount. Get through the woods and arrive at the not-at-all-safe confines of Uncle Montague’s cottage. You may want to look at this very recent blog on recounts, written specifically  in support of this blog; it is directly relevant, focusing as it does on a sequence of texts to support recount writing based in some rather scary woods. The experience of journeying from A to B via some curious landmarks lends itself to classic storytelling, but also to diary writing, letters – the works.

There is nothing to say that you cannot double up. Tell a story. Write a letter.  Draw out a character through diary writing.  It’s worth noting that Frankie, our GDS exemplification pioneer and veteran of three frameworks now,  does just this.They play to their strengths: an explanation related to ballet and an autobiographical account of a ballet performance; a report based on Morpurgo’s Giant’s Necklace and a diary entry based on the same. Of those four pieces, that’s three recounts. The dual narrative of the visit to the fridge at night would fit in the bracket of narrative so we are drawing upon some common knowledge/skills strands, chiefly chronology,  which done well, supports cohesion.  Cohesion is our friend. For GDS, we just need to bring it to life through descriptive detail, authorial comments, reflections and pointers. I would like to briefly refer here to what Barrs and Cork's The Reader in the Writer (CLPE)  called 'breaks in the time sequence'. Our strongest writers should have the confidence to know - in the course fo drafting and revising - when to tell a story, and when to almost step out if it - to linger, or comment on a detail, to have a thought.  I'll be referring to both this book and this concept in more detail later in the year.   Just to wrap up this paragraph, and in reference to Frankie's balletic pieces, there is something, too, about allowing children to work with confidence in areas that they know, or care about – ideally both.

I have also blogged on biographies in support of this particular set of advice.  Much like the blog on short stories, this offers up a range of titles that are high quality in content and presentation, but that will not require excessively long reading periods; they are perfect for modelling all the standard, functional requirements for the form, but also in the way that they offer up particular turns of phrase, curiosities, and 'breaks in the time sequence', once again, to add real interest and verve to our writing approaches. Look, too, to quotes from research.  Harking back to the long-gone days of level 6, one of my best ever writers cut me to the quick by including a final, devastating quote centred on the final moments of Dr Barnado.  It was a perfect choice, perfectly placed.  It showed a wonderful control of content.  It said "call me level 6 by all means but I am aiming for something a bit deeper than that, thank you very kindly."  I can still remember its effect quite vividly at the end of a long night of marking.  

Biographies are a personal favourite for drawing out great writing, but they might take longer as we are going to need to build in time to research, though this may well have happened across the curriculum.   They used to form part of what I called the ‘expert text’ strand of my teaching in year 6.  I’ll be talking about that in greater depth (ahem) when I look at longer term concerns relating to developing strong, confident writers – curriculum design in particular.  For now, biographies may be worth considering as they can draw upon the content taught in other curricular areas, or from the children’s own interests and passions. They are ideal texts in that they are not a massive leap from storytelling. They are storytelling. They move through time.  Events occur. Things tend to change.  There are some incredible books to guide and inspire your children to bring their chosen subject to vivid, documented life. Queen of the Falls  by Chris Val Allsburg is a standout, as described in that last linked blog that I put together to support this piece. Do check out the link, there are some incredible texts there that would enrich any classroom.

Though not in the TAF as an explicit statement, biographies are also a good vehicle for demonstrating a sure grasp of verbs and I continue to maintain that verb forms are a reliable indicator of a promising writer.  I don’t mean flinging around complex synonyms for simpler terms (this is one myth, or misinterpretation, that I have had to address at an out-of-county cluster).  I mean developing a sure grasp of managing the ebb and flow and the stormier waters of the writing – taking us forward, back or holding us in time as the piece requires.  

A shorter dash to the end

I just want to round off with some quick tips that I hope to expand on in a subsequent blog.  They are geared towards nudging the writing process towards something that reflects the realities of writing outside of the primary (year 6?) classroom.

• keep in mind that the curriculum is very clear on the importance of planning, drafting, revision, editing, and publishing. All play their part.  Spending longer on fewer pieces will likely pay dividends – but with plenty of deliberate practice woven into teaching sequences
• think about the reader in the writer (I shall definitely be revisiting this with more explicit reference to CLPE’s seminal book that is likely to pop up again in this series).  Listen to their interests. Be open to their ideas about what they would like to write.  Encourage this to extend beyond the confines of the classroom by encouraging private writing and celebrating anything shared from outside school
• time is short but dialogue deserves a slice of it, both in terms of peer-to-peer feedback, but also in terms of exploring ideas, weighing up options, suggesting and evaluating constructions. It is just as important for higher attaining writers as those that find writing more challenging
• time too, is the writer’s friend and enemy.  Do we carve out enough time and sufficient headspace for children to write to the best of their abilities?  To get florid, do we give them that freedom to pick up an idea, run with it mentally as if it is a windy day playtime and see where it ends up.  If we know where we are heading in terms of a writing outcome, why not share it well in advance so that as we move through the stages of reading, exploration and practice, ideas can form, dissolve or crystallise.  Splitting a piece of writing around a weekend can really help to sharpen and reform those initial, tentative ideas

Well that is that for now.  You will be up-past-your elbows in SATs at present, and I wish you and your children the very best (in every sense) with that, but I hope that this proves to be of use for those of you that have a little further to go in terms of being ready for the writing assessment deadlines once SATs week is over. If you have any queries, or would like me to elaborate any further on any of the above, do get in touch using the e-mail address below.

The title of this blog is back-to-front. We're in the final weeks of academic spring - that whizzy dash of a term - so time is relatively short in terms of taking on board advice relating to end of year statutory assessment. It should be the short and the long of GDS writing – but that just sounds wrong. So why “the long”?  Essentially, we need to fight back against the short termism of the past two years.

The nature of this year's framework, and its dissemination has allowed some space for deeper thought and discussion with colleagues in schools and on training courses. There is a sense that we are less in thrall to the prescriptive specifics of the here-today-gone-next-academic-year ITAF experiments of the past two years. This year, the STA kept good on their promises to release the frameworks, exemplification and associated guidance earlier in the year. Better still, we know what to expect in the coming year. That is always nice. Especially if you are in a year group subject to statutory assessment. Especially given the nature of accountability and what this means for class teachers at the sharp end of where writing meets statutory assessment outcomes. As a year 6 teacher, if I am completely honest, at times it would have felt like my life depended on that basic courtesy. You know, a bit of forewarning. Definitely appreciate that.

Short term and long term views

With this space, and the shifts in focus (as opposed to formality), it’s easier to see where the reader-writer that many of us hold as an ideal sits within this system. There are explicit references to the influence of reading and to the importance of audience and purpose within the framework. It’s an emotive subject, writing assessment. Throw accountability into the mix and the skewing and perversion of what ‘good writing’ might mean really begins to kick in. This series of blogs does not look to add to that debate. Not because it isn’t important. I just feel that plenty of others have that task covered. These blogs are intended to be strictly helpful.

The series is going to divide along two lines.

The short

will be squarely written with year 6 teachers in mind. These blogs will offer short-term advice relating to the final stretch of this assessment period (2017-8) and how the particular requirements of the Teacher Assessment Framework may be navigated, and hopefully met in ways that feel principled and are supportive of what we might – in a giddy moment – call “real English teaching”. [Please note: I always want to challenge what is meant by “real this” or “proper that” but time is short and I think you catch my drift].

The long

will offer advice, guidance, thoughts, and further reading to support whole school development of willing-and-able reader-writers (not to mention listener-speakers). These blogs look to focus on Greater Depth (the official brand) in the subject, but equally we now have a system that is more supportive of greater depth in a truer, happier sense - nurturing children that have plenty of reading powering their writing. This is a long term endeavour - and by that I don’t mean merely the whole of year 6. It speaks to curriculum design and content, pedagogy, reading and writing cultures – the works. And it feels good to be able to see a refocussing on that. It never went away, but there has been a necessity for flurries of short-term advice as one hoop became a swinging wrecking ball in a kind of educational equivalent to running through the Sonic the Hedgehog environment, whilst trying to teach and assess reading and writing in a high stakes system of accountability.

Let's take a quick breath after that last sentence.

The reader(s) in the writer(s)

Let’s take a look at each of the bulleted statements that make up the Year 6 standard. Up first, writing effectively for a range of audiences and purposes.

Working at GDS-Purpose and audience

Expected standard

The pupil can write effectively for a range of purposes and audiences, selecting language that shows good awareness of the reader e.g. the use of first person in a diary; direct address in instructions and persuasive writing.

Greater depth

The pupil can write effectively for a range of purposes and audiences selecting the appropriate form and drawing independently on what they have read as models for their own writing (e.g. literary language, characterisation, structure.)

The above is taken from the STA moderator training delivered autumn 2017 (these materials are available to schools within NCA tools). It sets out the requirements around audience and purpose for children working at the Expected Standard and those working at Greater Depth within the standard (GDS). Both look for effective writing for a range of purposes and audiences. GDS, though, has the emboldened requirement that children draw independently on what they have read. The independent bit is key here – we are not looking for the whole class application of that killer phrase from the latest shared text. It is more subtle than that. I say this because in the updated exemplification file for GDS writing - Frankie, our perennial high-achieving 11 year old - there are specific references to real writers:

‘the title suggests an explanation, drawing on the language of ‘Just So’ stories’.

This is a nice touch in the piece. Well played Frankie. However, it does not set a precedent. It is important, in reading the commentaries in the exemplification files – and relating to the moderator training samples - that we keep the main thing the main thing. What is the statement asking for? How is this reflected in the child’s writing? The statement neither asks for nor requires the obvious influence of a specific writer. We want, though, to see in our children, writers that can turn a phrase that sounds worthy of being read aloud and does not make you squint (too often) at a clunky moment. Please resist the urge to play spot the children’s lit canon references in your children’s work. Focus more on the effect it had on you, as you place yourself in the shoes of its intended reader.

If you want to look to further reading, consider CLPE’s seminal The Reader in the Writer by Myra Barrs and Valerie Cork (2001). This classic title documents a research project that looked at how reading influences developing writing. I read it a long time ago. I recently re-read it. I think my first reading came too early in my career as I did not recognise or fully understand half as much as what I did on second reading. It is timelessly good so it may be worth purchasing a copy for the school and asking a reading/writing advocate with several years’ teaching under their belt to read, distil and look to explore how the book’s messages might help to further develop the long-term journey to accomplished, meaningful writing in your school. If you need further persuasion, here’s the A S Byatt quote that prefaces the book:

I think I see good reading as the best way of encouraging, and making possible, good writing.

A. S. Byatt, On History and Stories

A quote for us all to cheer there. We will not need to lift it wholesale and replicate it in our children’s evidence banks, but it would be nice to see its spirit threaded through their work. Later blogs (and others already written by my colleagues) explore this learning through immersion in more depth and also touch upon the teaching of contextualised grammar.

Who do you think you are? Choosing register

Working at GDS-speech and writing

• the pupil can distinguish between the language of speech and writing and choose the appropriate register
• pupils working at 'greater depth' should be able to consistently distinguish between speech (e.g. playground language, informal conversation...), and written language (e.g. that used for stories, reports, persuasion...)
• 'register' refers to pupils selecting vocabulary appropriate to the context of the writing, for example, indicators of formality in a letter of complaint; concision within a stage direction; contracted forms in casual dialogue

I should point out that this slide (from the same presentation as before) behaves differently to the last. Where the previous slide placed EXS alongside GDS for comparison, here we have the GDS statement and some clarification. This statement – and the next – will require further unpicking. There is some crossover between bullet two and three so I will return to these shortly in another blog.

For now, I would draw your attention once again to the moderator training materials in NCA tools, specifically Activity 3 relating to GDS pieces C and D. Here moderators were asked to look at two letters written in a unit based upon Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet. In this task, the writers were asked ‘to write a letter from Juliet to her father, begging him to reconsider his decision to force her to marry Paris.’ Only one of the letters is judged to meet this particular statement relating to register.

The materials include a commentary that sets out why one of the letters does not meet the statement. Reasons given include the following: ‘slips into overt confrontation that show a lack of understanding of the etiquette of the day’; ‘contemporary colloquialism’; ‘less precise choices of vocabulary’. The judgement around etiquette stuck me as harsh on first (and second and third) reading. Certainly, a rounded understanding of the historical/social/cultural context is a key feature in GCSE level English learning. I would want to cut a ten/eleven year old a little slack there. But it is fair to say that the letter does not really meet the brief convincingly enough to say that this statement has been met.

The lesson here seems to be around task selection. I happen to think it was a rich task and both letters have a range of strengths. So we would not want to avoid this type of writing in class. Not at all. However, if you are looking to secure the ‘right’ kinds of evidence, you may wish to think carefully about the work that is being set and how well equipped your pupils are in taking on the task. I must stress, this should not limit or narrow the range of writing opportunities or the scale of ambition you serve up to the class. You just might need to be strategic about when and where extended writing opportunities occur. I am going to be returning to task selection in an imminent blog, and will share an approach I used in my year 6 classroom that we might label “Expert Texts.” This will sit under the umbrella of long-term approaches that are aimed at a whole school audience.

Formality is for life, not just for previous academic years

Working at GDS-levels for formality

• the pupil can exercise an assured and conscious control over levels of formality, particularly through manipulating grammar and vocabulary to achieve this
• there is no requirement for pupils to manage shifts between levels of formality within a single piece of writing; however, pupils working at 'greater depth' must demonstrate the ability to manipuulate grammar and vocabulary according to the conext of the writing. The emphasis on 'assured and conscious control' refers to the fact that choices made in their writing are deliberrate and considered

We are on safer ground here at statement 3, I think. I’ve shared plenty of our thoughts on the topic of formality. No longer must we move between formal and informal, or vice versa in more than one place in more than one piece. I just had a happy little cry then. It was beautiful. However, if your adept young writer happens to do this, and does it well, hurrah, that is evidence too. Whatever they are doing with formality it has to be appropriate and consistent for as long as it needs to be. That might be a whole piece or it might be a section.

Formality done. Final statement….

Check that it is all kept in check: punctuation

Working at GDS-punctuation

• the pupil can use the range of punctuation taught at KS2 correctly (e.g. semi-colons, dashes, colons, hyphens) and, when necessary, use such punctuation precisely to enhance meaning and avoid ambiguity 
• the statement does not refer to specific punctuation marks, or to how they should be used. Pupils working at 'greater depth' should demonstrate their understanding of a range of punctuation taught at Key Stage 2, using it correctly and precisely to enhance meaning and avoid ambiguity

I will not linger here. Punctuation is not new and it is visible, and - so long as we are secure in our subject knowledge – relatively straight forward to evaluate. Look for the usual ailments: overuse; inappropriate use; too narrow a range; too extensive a range; basic errors. The proofreading aspect of writing will come into play here. Basic accuracy is critical. Sensible ambition is advisable. Does that mark earn its place? If not, encourage the writer to reconsider, reshape, re-form, remove and/or replace. Experiment for sure, but have good reason to commit to your final choices and placement.

Full stop.

That’s it for now. A bit of a blogging mission statement and some initial responses to this year’s published materials. I must close by saying thank you to my colleague, Clare Hodgson, on the Herts Assessment team. We co-deliver our Assessing and Securing GDS in Year 6 writing course and – I kid you not – it has been a joyful and enlightening experience on every occasion. If you don’t believe me, I have the many evaluations that prove it. Therefore, I also want to thank those colleagues that have worked with us in schools as well as on courses. Not just in Herts I might add – thank you to teaching colleagues in London, Macclesfield, Essex and Cambridgeshire– you have been wonderful to work and share with.  

Last summer, post SATs, the Hertfordshire team of KS2 moderators visited 119 schools over three and half weeks. As always, it was an intense and time pressured period but one that also offers a window into what is happening with regard to writing in a diverse range of schools. Now that some time has passed, I have been able to collect and compile, not only my own thoughts, but also those of many of the KS2 moderators and some of the headteachers who received a Moderation visit. Some common threads emerge that are worth sharing so that they can help to inform our planning and teaching of writing this year. I also hope that in sharing these findings, they can allay some of the anxieties that staff feel when they hear that they are to be moderated. To this end, the Assessment team have also produced a short document Year 6 checklist – writing teacher assessment that we hope will further support teachers with both their understanding of the revised Teacher Assessment Framework (TAF) and the requirements of moderation. 

Lesson number 1: Write away!

Carry on writing before, during and after SATs

It is understandable to want to focus on some SATs test preparation before the SATs test window. However, where this takes place at the expense of continued writing opportunities, this does impact on the number of writing pieces available and hence writing results. It is often from April onwards that a child is able to more independently apply the teaching from the autumn and first part of the spring term and really show us what they can do. Ideally, the majority of your evidence for the majority of your pupils would be drawn from the later part of the year where you can revisit, for example, the effective use of dialogue or features of formal writing that were taught in a more scaffolded way in the first part of the year. Having this bank of evidence from the later part of the year is key to the success in achieving the ‘pupil can’ statements independently.

Best practice saw schools where extended writing and editing was the norm. Moderators often reported a copious range of quality writing, often with two or even three literacy books filled per child – although the left hand page may be left blank for improvements or writing tips. Other schools may divide writing across folders and subject books. It is not about how the work is presented, but it is about ensuring there is sufficient writing to meet all the ‘pupil can’ criteria.

In one school, the moderator was impressed by the school’s cross-curricular approach to their writing. The moderator felt that it showed a really good emphasis on writing in all lessons.

In many schools moderators praised the good choices of quality texts that were inspiring the children and raising the standard of writing produced. Furthermore, many moderators commented on the passion shown by staff for writing and books. Moderators saw many staff really encouraged writing through a love of reading widely and plenty of role play and talk for writing. Moderators also commented on the skilful teaching of grammar through reading and through the children’s own writing, rather than taking up time with too many discrete grammar exercises. (It is worth remembering that the GAPS test does not form part of the school’s headline accountability measure, while the writing TA does.)

It is a privilege and an inspiration to moderate in these schools and there is much to celebrate – not least the enthusiasm, subject knowledge and skill of the Year 6 teachers.

Lesson number 2: Who are we writing for?

Consider the range of writing opportunities offered to ensure that they cover a range of purposes and audiences – both formal and informal.

Keep in mind the following four ‘pupil can’ criteria (as they work together) when planning the writing for the year: 

Basically, pupils need to be able to know the purpose and audience for the writing, and hence select appropriate language and sentence structure to fit the purpose and audience. So what types of tasks/genres should a teacher cover in Year 6?

To answer this question, it is worth looking at the exemplification and considering the range of tasks and the purpose and audience for each task in each collection. Let’s look, for example, at the tasks included in Morgan’s collection:

Morgan: EXS exemplification

Piece A: A short story

What is the audience and purpose? Probably any person over 10 years old who wants to be entertained/intrigued/spooked.

So the writer needs to include cliff-hangers/time-shifts, interesting characters, literary techniques, dialogue that both moves the story forward and reveals character etc. If the pupil can do this, they will be meeting the ‘pupil can’ statements above (differentiated by outcome).  

Piece B: A recount

What is the audience and purpose? To inform parents about the Viking day.

This can be written informally, in a chatty and conversational style, as it is for a familiar audience. However, it will also need a level of detail to make it of interest, and technical vocabulary that may need to be explained.

Piece C: A letter

Who is the audience/ what is the purpose? This is a formal letter to the workshop leaders, to thank them and give recommendations.  Pupils might be expected to make more use of passive constructions, modals, nominalisation, abstract nouns and succinct word choice (e.g. discover rather than find out) etc.

Piece D: Short story

This piece deliberately mimics literacy techniques used in the play Macbeth.

Piece E: Balanced argument

Who is the audience/ what is the purpose? The intended audience is the Local Council, in order to present their own views.

Again, this is another piece of writing with a formal tone. We might expect the features of formal writing to be evident and some direct address to the reader.

Piece F: Science investigation

A formal write up – we would expect passive voice, headings etc.

Looking across the pieces, you can see that there are opportunities to write for different purposes and audiences – and hence the writing will need to be appropriate to both task and audience. You don’t need to complete the same tasks – however you do need to allow opportunities for pupils to write both formally and informally as appropriate to a range of audiences and purposes. Consider, for every writing task, what the purpose is for the task, and who the audience is. Then consider what features – types of language and vocabulary – the writing might contain for these different audiences and purposes.

In the main, pupils tend to write ‘down the middle’: neither formally nor informally. It is the formal that most will struggle with. Therefore, we need to model and provide opportunities for formal writing, and then show where else this could be used – for example, a character in a story that is trying to assert their authority over others may speak more formally.

The trick is not necessarily to tell pupils to include a long list of features – but to consider purpose and audience and find some good model text. Above all, the writer needs to be able to write with the reader in mind – does it make sense? Can the reader follow it? Could I/should I phrase or structure any parts differently to make it more effective or easier to follow for the reader? 

Lesson number 3: Ease up on the scaffolding as you go through the year

There need to be an adequate number of independent pieces of writing. For schools using a ‘Talk for Writing’ type approach, the writing, at least towards the end of the year, needs to be at the ‘innovate’ stage and not be heavily modelled. If a number of children in the class have very similar sounding pieces it is hard to use this as evidence for a ‘pupil can’ statement (unless independently applied by the child elsewhere.)

This also applies to teacher feedback – ease up on being too directive as the year progresses. For example, instead of pointing out a spelling or grammatical error, give pupils time to find them and correct them independently.

Lesson number 4: Take time to understand the new criteria for greater depth and what this looks like in the writing

One of the main strands emerging this year regarded securing and accurately assessing ‘greater depth’ – perhaps not surprising given the changes to the TAF last year.  The revised ‘pupil can’ statements for greater depth represent the greatest change.  Given these changes, and the fact that teachers only have one exemplification portfolio for GDS (Frankie), it is not surprising that it is difficult to decide on the ‘cuspy’ children. 

It would seem that the 'pupil can' statement that was hardest to evidence was the statement regarding ‘assured and conscious control over levels of formality’. At the STA training for Lead Moderators, the STA stated that:  

Pupils working at ‘greater depth’ must demonstrate the ability to manipulate grammar and vocabulary according to the context of the writing. The emphasis on ‘assured and conscious control’ refers to the fact that choices made in their writing are deliberate and considered.

Obviously, writing such as ‘Frankie’s’ clearly meets this statement - but how ‘assured and conscious’ do our Year 6 writers need to be? Here it is worth turning to the ‘Leigh’ exemplification file as a benchmark as Leigh only narrowly misses the greater depth standard. There is one piece – piece B – where Leigh is able to meet the ‘assured and conscious control’ statement. If your pupil can write like piece B more often, then they are in with a chance of being at ‘Greater depth’. The annotations on the remaining pieces show where Leigh has been less consistent and hence why the award remains at expected standard. 

Reflect too, as you read the collection, on the purpose and audience for each piece in the collection. Are there enough opportunities for Leigh to write formally? Could more opportunities for formal writing have helped to lift Leigh into ‘Greater depth’? Does the recount provide any evidence for Greater depth? (No!) Additionally, has Leigh been given adequate time to re-draft some sections of her work to consider precision of language, or tidy up punctuation? The implications are that greater depth writers may need longer to craft their writing, as well as more exposure to a range of reading material and a range of tasks that have a clearly defined purpose and audience.

Lesson number 5: Spelling matters

Moderators see the Year 3/4 spellings misspelt more often than the words from the Year 5/6 statutory word lists. This is mainly because, as Year 6 teachers know, Year 6 pupils rarely use the words from the Year 5/6 spelling lists in their writing, whereas they do use the words from Year 3/4. In addition, half the words on the Year 5/6 statutory word lists are, in fact, easier for pupils to spell than many of the Year 3/4 words.  These Year 5/6 words do need to be evidenced, but they can be evidenced through spelling tests or dictation, if they are not naturally occurring in pupil writing.

Therefore, crack the Year 3/4 words before the Year 5/6 as these are the ones the pupils use most in their writing.  Model how to spell when modelling writing. “What spelling rule do I need to remember?  What could I do to try to spell this word?  Where could I get help?” etc.

Remember too that pupils should be using dictionaries and thesauruses in order to help them to use and spell more ambitious vocabulary choices.

To finish, let’s step back and think about each standard. A key question must be:-

What commonly stops pupils being the standard above?

Where pupils failed to meet the ‘working towards’ statements, they often had difficulty with sentence punctuation and spelling.

Where pupils failed to meet the ‘expected standard’, they often had difficulty with cohesion and writing for a range of purposes (mainly falling down on formal/ variation of sentence structure.) Spellings (frequently still Year 3/4) were often an issue. Watch out too for the comma splice.

Where pupils failed to meet the ‘greater depth’ standard, they may not have demonstrated the accurate (and considered) use of the range of punctuation, nor the conscious control over levels of formality required.

Given these difficulties, it can be useful to read pupil drafts, and place writing into three piles:

• writing that would most benefit from feedback around sentence construction/ punctuation
• writing that would most benefit from input around cohesion, and
• writing that would most benefit from feedback around word choice (particularly for more formal/academic writing. Consider too the importance of verb form). 

The following day, offer conference feedback to a group at a time. Meanwhile pupils not working with you could be given various writing or editing tasks – including reviewing spellings. (Ask pupils to read their work word by word backwards from the end in order to notice any spelling errors.)

Finally, as Lead Moderator for KS2 writing, I would genuinely like to express my gratitude to all the schools that we visited. Despite the fact that the visits are compulsory, the warmth of welcome never fails to endear and impress. As I am sure the moderating team will concur, it is a privilege to spend time in so many schools with staff who really care, just as it is a privilege to read the thoughts and words of so many 10 and 11 year olds.

Read more: Reflections on the 2022 moderation at both Key Stages 1 and 2. 

Our mental health seems to be something we’ve taken for granted, but the shifts in financial circumstances and the remnants of the Covid outbreak, are forcing us to pause and reflect.  The threads of good mental health are under significant strain and in danger of snapping.  Most worryingly, this is visible in both adults and children.

I’ve been reading David Harewood’s memoir Maybe I Don’t Belong Here.  He’s now a famous, critically acclaimed and successful actor – Homeland, Blood Diamond and Supergirl - but in his memoir he talks honestly and poignantly about his life, his breakdowns and his experiences of being sectioned.  In his opening chapter, A Letter to the Reader Harewood speaks vividly about pain, identity and belonging.  He says that he ‘struggle[d] to forge a sense of identity and belonging as a Black British man’ and links this to his first direct experience of racist abuse.’

‘A small crack appeared, perhaps just the faintest fissure at first, but over the years it grew wider and wider.  Caught between the two halves of my identity, I disappeared into the space between and woke up in a mental institution.  I had completely lost my mind.’

Harewood’s piece demonstrates just how vital it is that we take care of ourselves and more specifically our mental health.  For me, it also served as a reminder that there are groups and communities for whom acknowledging and talking about mental health is considered taboo, unacceptable within the culture or an external force that cannot be trusted.  I know.  I am part of one of these communities and I share in these concerns and fears.  They are not without foundation.  This may partially explain why racially minoritised groups are less likely to access mental health services at an early stage and benefit from talk therapies and therapeutic approaches.  But it does not explain why they are less likely to receive a mental health referral prior to a visit to A&E or a brush with the justice system[i].  Or why Asian or Asian British Pakistani men had the lowest recovery rates for IAPT talking therapies[ii].

In a recent piece of training we delivered, we included a video from MIND.UK in which a black man talked about receiving counselling from a Sri Lankan therapist and compared the experience and outcomes to his initial session with a white therapist.  In his specific case, it showed the importance of cultural connection, but more significantly the need to acknowledge a racialised experience when offering support.  For me, it really made me think about how important it is to ensure that people of colour in schools – pupils, parents and families, staff and governors – receive this level of care, this willingness to listen and an openness to acknowledge and understand.  This is particularly important for pupils whose behaviour is starting to be characterised as challenging or disruptive.  Harewood talks about his school experiences: the lightness, fun and clowning of primary school. But his exuberance later became perceived as disruptive in secondary school, and he was gradually sifted into a behaviourally challenged set.  Neither his family nor school were fully aware of the frequency of racist taunts, physical and verbal abuse, pressure and desperation to assimilate, or the sense of fear that cloaked it all.  Harewood’s experience mirrored a familiar scenario that he could not have been aware of at the time - but we now know to be true.  The Against the Odds report (2017) found that boys from African and Caribbean communities in the UK had similar levels of mental health problems at age 11 to white and mixed heritage boys. However, national data shows that African and Caribbean men are more likely to develop some types of mental health problems during adulthood[iii].

Our mental health can become frayed in a variety of ways. Those delicate threads start to shed becoming more fragile and threadbare as we move through each stage of life and begin to grapple with the demands of adulthood. 

I was heartened during the training this week when a secondary school dealing with behaviour issues mentioned that they had implemented the offer of a counselling session for victims and perpetrators.  In other conversations during this year, I have heard senior leaders in schools talking about peer-led mentoring, providing questionnaires to their stakeholders, revisiting and monitoring young people involved in racist incidents, drawing on community-links to better understand dynamics they might not be aware of, and one specific request from a school for assistance with supporting their pupils with racial trauma.  In one secondary school colleagues were surveyed and given the opportunity to reflect on their personal racial experiences.  The results were powerful and deeply moving.  Had a colleague taken an interest in the young Harewood’s mental health when he was experiencing racism, what impact could their care and willingness to listen have made to his life’s trajectory?  This work needs to take place if wellbeing and good mental health are a genuine priority and become an intrinsic part of a school’s preventative measures.

Our challenge is to understand what good mental health looks like in all those around us; to peel back the layers of self-protection and attempts to bind ourselves into the protective cocoons of determination, resilience and stereotypes about strength.  Real strength lies in the ability to ask for help and accept support before we are overwhelmed.  We must teach ourselves and our children to do this.

[i] A recent study of nearly 15,000 young people accessing mental health services found that young people from Minority Ethnic backgrounds were more likely to be referred to mental health services through routes such as youth justice and social services, than they were through perceived ‘voluntary’ routes such as primary care. Ethnic Differences in Referral Routes to Youth Mental Health Services Julian Edbrooke-Childs, PhD, and Praveetha Patalay, PhD

[ii] ‘Asian or Asian British-Pakistani men had the lowest recovery rates for IAPT talking therapies.’ McManus S, Bebbington P, Jenkins R, Brugha T. (eds.) (2016) Mental health and wellbeing in England: Adult Psychiatric Morbidity Survey 2014. Leeds: NHS Digital.

[iii] Boys from African and Caribbean communities in the UK have lower levels of mental health problems at age 11 compared to White or mixed heritage boys.  However, national data shows that African and Caribbean men in the UK are much more likely to develop some types of mental health problem during adulthood. For example, symptoms relating to schizophrenia, and to a lesser extent post-traumatic stress disorder. This does not occur in countries with a predominantly Black population. It appears to be an environmental risk related to experiences in northern Europe and the United States. Centre for Mental Health (2017) Against the odds: Evaluation of the Mind Birmingham Up My Street programme.

As a professional in the education sector for many years, it never ceases to amaze me how, once you are made aware of a ‘new’ initiative to address an issue, your focus of attention is inexplicably drawn to its potential influence. Over the years this has, for me, involved multifarious ‘fads’ that are ‘in vogue’ for short spaces of time. They become ephemeral as impact is minimal or they are based on subjective research.

The opposite of this situation has had such a profound impact on me recently, both professionally and personally. I am drawn to share my experiences and ideas in a wider context through the writing of this blog. I will separate it into three parts. Part 1 will provide an overview, rationale and intended impact. Part 2 will focus on ‘what that actually looks like’ in practice in Primary Schools and Part 3 will explore specific examples of the implications of what happens with young adults when their needs are not met early in their education.     

Rationale 

Led by Rachel Macfarlane, our overarching purpose at HFL Education is to ‘ensure that every young person, through access to a great education, should be able to realise their potential, regardless of where they live or their circumstances. Their education should be free from barriers presented by a lack of equality, diversity, and inclusion’. 

As a Primary Maths Adviser, a key part of my work focuses on the removal of any existing and potential barriers to learning. Within this, ‘barriers’ can sometimes be unintentionally introduced across the range of children’s needs from all prior attainment points. This will be explored in detail in Part 2 of this blog. 

Influencers 

HFL’s Education Services Team continues its focus upon meeting the needs of disadvantaged and vulnerable children. This has involved engaging with nationally recognised educationalists. Dr Dan Nicholls’ recent input has had a profound effect on my thinking and subsequent actions. Especially with regard to the theme of ‘belonging’ and its associated barriers. This includes heightened understanding of ideas such as ‘invisibility’, ‘disconnection’, ‘trapped by circumstance’, ‘security of a far greater equity through education’ and (linked to the title of this blog) ‘giving individuals what they specifically need and seeking to close the growing chasm between ‘those that have’ and ‘those that have not’ and ‘the curriculum as a lever’. 

I am not alone in my thinking. A recent blog by Kate Kellner-Dilks explores the whole curriculum as being ‘The moral imperative: creating a curriculum that develops identity, broadens horizons and enables success for all’. And in her recent and insightful blog, Nicola Randall asks the question ‘How can we advantage the disadvantaged?’ and states ‘…a child who has experienced economic hardship at some point, may not have developed a deep sense of self, built up over years of making meaningful connections with others and so do not feel that this community, this education system, is for them’.   

‘Belonging’ (from both a professional and personal perspective) 

I have been influenced by the collegiate approach within HFL. This has enhanced my thinking even more profoundly and led me to reflect on situations and circumstances in both my professional and personal domains. Within those, I recognise that conditions outside of the academic curriculum have had significant impact. These include instances from roles as a teacher and a leader, including being the Designated Person for Safeguarding and Professional and Personal Well-Being Lead, and as a child and father: 

• a boy in Year Five, whose father was a doctor and mother was a solicitor trashing the classroom
• children hiding in various locations around the school
• a girl in Year Four who was constantly looking out of the window as she was concerned about what state her alcoholic mother would be in when she went home
• following a boy through a South London town centre (whilst in constant contact with the police) who had escaped from school to visit his estranged sister who was in another school as a result of domestic abuse 
• dealing with a stream of parents/carers who were about to be homeless – many of these families were living in one room 
• providing food for children who came to school hungry 
• discovering that for a group of recent arrived Romanian children, the curriculum was not fit for purpose (explored further in a blog here)
• finding out by chance that my son was lip-reading in Year Two as he was deaf in one ear
• overcoming my own profound stutter/stammer during my time in Secondary School with multifarious strategies – which is almost resolved but still apparent on occasions – (this will be explored further in Part 3) 

In all these situations, the personnel had different ‘belonging’ needs and either adapted to the situations as ‘best they could’ or, at breaking point, implicitly ‘cried’ for help. One incredibly challenging situation was attempting to address gang violence and its associated racism that was having a severely negative impact in a school in a London suburb.  

In a recent meeting at HFL Education, David Cook referenced our ‘sphere of control’. We have control over the content of the curriculum, what we place emphasis upon, and also upon how we deliver it.

We, too, can influence the culture within the school. Both must meet the needs of all. There be may other issues outside of the curriculum to which we are not in control, and this may involve situations as dramatic as I have shared here. There could potentially be issues that affect a child’s understanding of belonging, or of not belonging; and this needs to be addressed. It can only be achieved through schools ‘getting to know’ each child as an individual to ensure that their needs are met and this ongoing process needs to be an integral part of the curriculum.  

Dr Dan Nicholls refers to this as a ‘call to arms’: ‘Our collective endeavour, is to use education to illuminate and bring more colour, to more lives. It is through our leadership and in teams, that we can unswervingly focus on our best levers, teaching and culture to bring light to this darkness and to say, “yes, you do belong.”

In her wonderful blog, (Part 1 and Part 2) Kirsten Snook, when referring to reading and disadvantaged children, uses the analogy of: ‘Think of the difference between having the stress chemical cortisol flooding the brain and body rather than the ‘feel-good’ factor of serotonin’.

How powerful would it be to have that scenario as the ultimate aim to enable a sense of belonging for all and thus removing all barriers? 

Moving forward     

The title of this blog (Part 1) refers to ‘Mind the Gap’. In this instance, I am not referring specifically to the gap in academic progress and attainment but more to the combined process of allowing ‘access for all’ children, which are inseparably linked, of course. I will use the analogy of alighting of a train to explain the intended outcomes and associated challenges.

On a recent train journey, it struck me that the doors providing the access to the destination are not initially in your control. As you arrive, you receive the following message: ‘We are approaching your destination. The doors will open automatically on the right-hand side. Please ensure that you mind the gap and take all your belongings with you. Have a safe journey’.

For me, this is figuratively similar to the ‘access’ gaps:

• the doors are access to the curriculum via a journey – different starting points and personal circumstances does not guarantee automaticity of access 
• access needs to be rapid or there is risk of being locked out – lack of progress 
• trusting the process is optional – reliability of content  
• access can be confusing – personalised needs not being met 
• being locked out with no access means another journey – disjointed path 
• one person in control – relies on complicity 
• personal belongings are similar but also different – backgrounds and societal situations can define needs 
• some people stumble and fall when crossing the gap, despite warnings – insecure application 

Ironically, all doors share this warning sign on the inside. Continuing the analogy of allowing ‘access for all’ through alighting the train, this makes me think it suggests that ‘If you do not fit in then please distance yourself’. Is this how children feel when they do not have a sense of belonging? 

On the same train, there are these posters: 

‘For many of the 1 in 5 disabled people in the UK, the attitude of others can make or break a journey. Remember, not all disability is visible. A little extra time and consideration can make a world of difference to everyone’s journey.  

Look out for each other.’ 

‘1 in 5 people have a disability, and not all are visible, so think twice before getting frustrated and be kind to others while travelling. 

Because everyone deserves a safe journey – We’re with you.’ 

These posters and associated dialogue speak for themselves when they are linked to the idea of ‘belonging’. The key realisation for me here was the link to values in society such as humility, accountability, collective responsibility, dignity, fairness, honesty, humanity, and individual rights.  

These values should be an interwoven part of any curriculum and linked to the personalised needs of each individual child, where fostering a sense of belonging for children can create an environment in which learning can thrive. When learning feels open and collaborative, children feel safe to share ideas. They are confident in applying their knowledge or skills and are supported when they take a risk or even experience failure. When children feel like someone knows them and believes in them, there is a greater motivation to succeed. 

There are often words and phrases in education linked to the gap such as ‘reducing’, ‘closing’, ‘diminishing’ or ‘removing’ it. Perhaps, in the 21st Century and beyond, the ‘gap’ will remain as societal, and other conditions mean that it exists and can be out of our full control. Our mission remains though. To enable all children to access and engage in rich learning and feel a deep sense of belonging in it. This will be explored further in Part 2 with the implications of not acting accordingly analysed in Part 3. 

In our last entry, we looked at the continuous loop of planning, teaching and assessing:

We focused on the planning side of things – ensuring our learning intentions were hyper-focused to ensure we knew exactly what we wanted the children to get out of the lesson. So, it makes sense to think that our next step is ensuring that the tasks we are asking the children to record demonstrate an understanding or application of the intended focus.

But, what does this look like? At the forefront, these outcomes should be closely linked to the learning intention. Any recording completed by the children should demonstrate what the children have learned not just what they have done. This is particularly true when completing a practical activity.

What’s the purpose?

This again brings us back to that part of the learning cycle that allows teachers to think why they are teaching this particular lesson. We need to think not just about the objectives but also about the purpose of each lesson. Are we wanting the children to learn the substantive knowledge (learning about concepts for example), the disciplinary knowledge (using working scientifically skills to answer an enquiry question), how we use our disciplinary skills or how to use a range of equipment?

How many foci can we have in a lesson?

It is ok to have more than one focus (science requires a great number of skills) but we should limit the number of foci in each lesson in order to ensure the outcomes are solid. Too many foci and our students will lose sight of those key learning intentions. In fact, research suggests that too often, the activities that children were completing were not actually strengthening their grasp of the specific concept (Intention and Substance Further Findings on Primary Science (2019). Sometimes the focus was too broad, sometimes the children were expected to complete too many things in each session, so the actual focus was a bit of a muddle and sometimes it was because the children didn’t actually understand the underlying concepts required (substantive) in order to recognise what the practical activity was showing them.

What we can take from this is that practical work must be connected to learning!

When it comes to recording, we have two areas to assess the children against – the substantive knowledge and the working scientifically skills.

Assessing working scientifically

Assessing working scientifically (although seemingly more challenging to ensure coverage, tracking and progression across an entire school) is quite straightforward in terms of assessment in each lesson. By planning and carrying out different investigations (with clear intentions on the working scientifically skill that is the focus of each lesson), teachers can assess against the national curriculum descriptors quite easily. The challenging part is ensuring children are given multiple opportunities across multiple strands to show their ability to meet these requirements (and that they’ve been taught how to use these skills effectively – again this comes back to intention and planning).

Assessing the Substantive

Assessment of the substantive can be a bit more open-ended and creative if we want it to be. Science as a core subject is a bit luckier in terms of recording as we are not pigeon-held into having to record in particular ways. Thus, the barrier of recording in written formats that some children truly struggle with doesn’t hold true for science. We can be more creative in the ways in which we ask our children to record. Yes, we can link science with literacy and mathematics and create posters, adverts, graphs, tables and the like as seen here:

but equally we can scaffold and allow for children to verbally or visually express their understanding in ways that tear down barriers that can prevent children from recording what they know.

Some examples can be found here:

This then gives teachers a very real way of understanding what their children know and can show.

There are many further examples of how to record creatively in our ‘Developing Young Scientists Bundle’ resources.

To conclude this part of our assessment in primary science series, I challenge you and your staff to think about how your children currently record their understanding. Do the children enjoy the opportunity to show what they’ve learned or is it constrained and prescriptive? Let’s allow them the opportunity to put pride in showing what they know.

Voices from the Classroom

Our new blog series, Voices from the Classroom, allows primary science teachers to share particularly effective practical experiences they have had with their classes. It’s a great way to showcase what your school is doing and written guidance and examples are available for those of you wishing to participate.

If this is something you would be interested in participating in, please e-mail Charlotte Jackson charlotte.jackson@hfleducation.org

Let’s be honest, assessment itself doesn’t simply begin with assessment. In fact, if we want to assess effectively, we need to first be thinking about our curriculum as a whole. What knowledge and skills do we want our young scientists to acquire? And then, how do we deliver this to ensure we are developing the knowledge, skills and understanding we intend to? Next, does the task we ask the children to complete show the knowledge and skills we intended for them to learn? Finally, does the work they provide show us that they have met the requirements for that particular lesson?

So where do we need to begin?

Ultimately, the ‘intention’ of learning is the key – what is the focus of the lesson? You may call this a WALT, an LO, an LI, an ‘I can’, but at the end of the day it is what we want the children to learn.

So, what could be the focus of a science lesson (particularly if you are completing a practical task)? It may be:

• developing understanding of the scientific approach to enquiry;
• developing knowledge and understanding of the natural world (substantive knowledge);
• learning how to use a piece of equipment or follow a practical procedure; and/or
• quite possibly a combination of some of the above.

And then, within that, which particular skill/what particular knowledge is the focus?

Armed with a clear objective and adding some success criteria, that shows how the children can achieve the learning you laid out, the purpose of the learning becomes crystal clear (Sarah Earle, Assessment in the Primary Classroom).

However, we all know that this is easier said than done…

How do we word it?

In fact, building learning objectives is, arguably, the most important part of planning and delivering a lesson. Should they be long and explanatory? Should they be short and to the point (especially if you are expecting the children to record it themselves)? Should they use technical vocabulary or aim to be more in child-speak? As Shirley Clark points out, the crucial part of any learning objective is that every child understands the intention of the lesson – whether they’ve written it themselves or not is not what matters.

Ultimately, the technical language we would ask the children to use in a science lesson should definitely be used in the learning objective (particularly if it is a specific skill or a new concept, we wish for them to learn/use).

Secondly, it should be context-free which allows children to understand that the skills or knowledge they are gaining aren’t tied specifically to that context but can be used in many different ways and returned to on a regular basis (Sarah Earle, Assessment in the Primary Classroom). We often do this particularly well in English where the focus of the learning intention is generally linked to the convention or genre as opposed to the specific context or text that is being used as the vehicle.

Within science, this is also possible by thinking about our learning intentions as skills or concept-specific as opposed to context-specific. This then leads teachers to know exactly what they expect to see when they assess the children against the substantive or disciplinary knowledge; it invites the teachers and children to answer the question: How well have I achieved this outcome? The success criteria can almost be used as a checklist to see how well the objective has been met.

Example

The below example shows how to build this kind of objective within a pattern seeking activity and shows explicitly the difference between a context-specific and concept-specific intention:

It is very clear how this skill/new understanding can actually be applied to many different contexts and can be a talking point to show the children that we could actually use this exact objective and criteria in a different context.

When children focus their recording on the learning objectives they cut down the time spent writing just for writing’s sake (recording what they’ve done) and they have more time to think, discuss and record what they’ve actually learned (Thinking doing, talking science).

This precision and the outcomes we see will allow us to be confident that pupils have acquired the necessary knowledge and skills rather than just experienced them.

So, let’s spend more time making our learning intentions purposeful for our outcomes and assessments of the skills and knowledge the children have acquired work to inform the next cycle of our teaching and learning.

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Voices from the Classroom

Our new blog series, Voices from the Classroom, allows primary science teachers to share particularly effective practical experiences they have had with their classes. It’s a great way to showcase what your school is doing and written guidance and examples are available for those of you wishing to participate.

If this is something you would be interested in participating in, please e-mail Charlotte Jackson charlotte.jackson@hfleducation.org

In Summer 2022, Year 4 class had the opportunity to attend the Pop-Up Outdoor Education Centre at Bayfordbury run by the University of Hertfordshire. We had a full day of sessions run by the students and staff of the postgraduate courses in outdoor environmental education.

Suffice it to say that our children LOVED their day out. Upon arrival, the children made little ‘photo frames’ out of sticks and twine and they were able to use these to help record the rest of their day. This was a great idea for all the children, but particularly for those who sometimes struggle to focus as it created a very effective and very real way of recording their observations from the day.

Pond dipping and mini-beasts

Pond dipping is always a hit with children, and it linked nicely to our Science unit: ‘Living things and their habitats’. The pupils were given a range of classification keys and identification sheets that allowed them to group, identify and name a variety of pond life. The skill was then repeated when we went on mini-beast hunts, where they used similar types of classification keys and sheets to identify even more living things in our local forest and grassland environments. The class had studied classification keys in the previous autumn/spring terms using our own school grounds, so it was a great opportunity to review and consolidate the children’s learning. The children felt incredibly confident collecting living things and ensuring they could safely return them to their homes. What was really amazing was that they were able to see a number of different living things that they hadn’t seen when we did this activity at school. This led to follow up conversations regarding different habitats in different places and how sometimes even a ‘pond habitat’ that is quite close by may still have different animals living in it!

Links to art

There were some fantastic links made between what the children had learned in Years 1, 2 and 3 about plants and artists that use nature to create art (particularly Andrew Goldsworthy). When we were looking at classification keys earlier in the year, we also focused on leaves and the different types of trees that we had in our local environment as well as what makes them unique. This understanding was particularly evident as the children began to make their own Goldsworthy-inspired piece and were talking about the different characteristics of the leaves and needles they could find. This link to art was brilliant and an interesting way to engage children with the nature around them.

Links to English

In the afternoon, the children were then given the opportunity to use what they’d learned from pond-dipping and mini-beast hunts to write poetry. This pre-learning allowed the children to use specific names of the creatures they had found and to describe carefully the habitats they had explored.

Becoming gardeners

Our final activity was the children’s favourite – planting many, many, MANY of their own flowers and fruit/vegetable plants. They created their own ‘plant pots’ out of newspaper (and were incredibly intrigued by the fact that they could put these pots directly in the ground without removing the paper). They were taught how to care for their new plants and what to expect from their growth. The children all took their plants home and planted them in their own gardens. At the end of the summer term, many of them stated that their plants were still growing strong.

Woodland Trust

When we returned to school, we completed a few follow up activities from the Woodland Trust that linked to our Forest School sessions – in particular the children created their own living thing that lived in one of the habitats that we had seen that day.

The outing really allowed our children to connect to nature and experience their learning first hand. The smiles and excitement really made the day worthwhile. It was such a success, and we very much appreciated the invitation from the University of Hertfordshire.

Voices from the Classroom

Our new blog series, Voices from the Classroom, allows primary science teachers to share particularly effective practical experiences they have had with their classes. It’s a great way to showcase what your school is doing and written guidance and examples are available for those of you wishing to participate.

If this is something you would be interested in participating in, please e-mail Charlotte Jackson charlotte.jackson@hfleducation.org

I have long considered that getting your Model for Writing (M4W) spot-on, is the key to successful teaching of writing. When working with colleagues to support with planning, this is where I often insist we start. I begin by guiding the teacher towards articulating what it is that they really want their pupils to be able to produce in writing by end of the unit, and what skills they want this piece to show.  This usually gets us straight to the crux of the issue because it gears us up to talk about what it is that the children can currently do, and what it is that they need to get better at. Moreover, this helps me as the adviser to support my colleagues in determination whether the skill being proposed really is an appropriate next step for the cohort. Often, at this point, I find myself trying to reign in their expectations (not something I do lightly, you may imagine). It may be that my colleague is attempting to move onto a skill that is not referenced in the year group’s Programme of Study, and doesn’t actually represent a suitable next step for the group; or, it may be that my colleague is moving on to the next writing skill too quickly, and that the children may benefit from lingering for longer on a skill that they are only just beginning to adopt in their independent writing.

When we have decided what it is that we want the piece to showcase, then we start writing. The term ‘showcase’ is one that I have found particularly helpful in the context of preparing M4W. The model – alongside demonstrating superb writing in line with whatever the task demands – should act as a window through which the skill that we are trying to foster can be seen. In this sense, the skill – be it ‘expanded noun phrases’ or ‘prepositional phrases’ or ‘subordinating conjunctions’ – should litter the piece to such an extent that the children cannot fail to notice its inclusion. This may make for a ever-so-slightly contrived piece of writing (although often I find that it does not) because you will be using that grammatical skill more often than you think strictly necessary. But, this is crucial because if that grammatical feature is only used once or twice, how likely is it that the children will consider it important enough to use in their own subsequent writing? Furthermore, if there are only a few examples contained within the piece, then you have allowed yourself a very limited number of examples to draw upon when discussing the use of this feature with the children. Instead, you would want multiple examples of this skill in use to allow you multiple ways in which its use can be referenced.

To exemplify this point, imagine that we are focusing on a year 3 class and that their next step to improve their writing is to extend their sentences using a range of subordinating conjunctions. When writing my model, I need to be mindful therefore that many of my sentences are indeed extended using this grammatical feature. If I am struggling to do that, then I might ask myself how the children will cope when asked to do the same task. Is it that the skill is not relevant to the task in hand (unlikely in this context, but it may be relevant if we were considering a different grammatical skill, such as speech demarcation for example)? In that scenario, the task may need to be re-thought to ensure that it acts as a suitable vehicle to allow this core writing skill to be enacted. What we must avoid at all costs is shoe-horning grammatical features into our models when they do not warrant a place. First and foremost, the model should have a purpose; the grammatical feature must work to ensure that the purpose of the writing is achieved.

When reviewing my model in light of my planned intentions, I might ask myself the following questions:

• how obvious is this grammatical feature within the model?
• is it masked by too many other grammatical features?

By this I am alluding to the fact that if you want a feature to shine, then you must dampen down the glare from the other writing features in the piece. It is counter-productive to try and showcase too many grammatical features in one go. If you equate ambitious modelling with throwing all the elements of the PoS for the year group into one piece, then disappointment will surely follow. Quite simply, the children will not be able to see the wood for the trees. Better to stick to just one core writing skill that you know the children need to work on, and let it shine.

This may mean holding back on other features that you know the children have yet to master. So, for example, if you deem ‘extending sentences through the use of subordinating conjunctions’ to be a key next step, then push your concerns about the use of prepositional phrases and adverbs of time to one place for a moment, and instead focus on the one big thing that you want them to develop. By all means, include a sprinkling of these in the piece, but don’t make them the star of the show.

What I find most rewarding about working with teachers to plan their M4W is that once complete, the model then dictates the learning required and therefore the lessons that need to be planned. Following completion of the model, the teacher and I may ask, ‘so if this is what I want the children to ultimately produce – or something like it – what learning experiences do I need to plan for to allow this to happen?’ This then leads to purposeful lesson planning, ensuring that each sequential stage provides a learning opportunity that will ultimately lead to the production of a successful piece, or pieces, of writing.

We may go on to rationalise that if we want this feature to be put to good use in their own writing, then the children will need ample opportunities to engage with the model. First and foremost, they should be encouraged to react and respond to the effectiveness of the piece: does it affect the reader in the way intended? What were the best bits? When the effect has been established, and ideally ‘felt’ by the children, then they can be guided to spot the grammatical feature that is ‘on show’; note its usage and consider its effectiveness within the context of the piece.

Some questions and prompts that I may use to support this are as follows:

• how might this piece sound if I removed the grammatical feature in focus?
• does it reduce the effectiveness of the piece? (In this instance, the model can be re-written to eliminate the feature).

Can the children spot what has been taken away? Can they name it? Can they re-insert the feature to restore the effectiveness of the piece? Can they come up with their own examples that they might be able to then use in their own piece of writing?

They will need to have lots of practise of using that grammatical feature – both contextualised within the piece that they are going to write, and discreet to ensure that they can apply the skill outside of the context. They would then benefit from seeing how other authors have used it to write effectively in similar contexts – cue the need for reading around the genre, where we show the children how other great authors have created similar effects using this grammatical feature. When ready, they need to have a go at creating an effective piece themselves –collaboratively at first. The teacher can be on hand at this time to collect examples of excellence where the feature in question –alongside other lovely bits – have been incorporated to good effect. Then, the children will need to have a go independently, incorporating this feature as they have been shown along the way. Finally, the children need to be encouraged to review their written piece.

• did it mimic the effect of the modelled piece? How and to what extent?
• how did the grammatical skill in question contribute to the effectiveness?
• can the children find an example of where they used this feature to great effect?
• conversely, can they find an example of where their writing was less effective and could have been made more so by the use of the feature in focus?

The journey across a unit towards producing a quality written outcome may seem long and undulating, but the starting point is always the same: it begins with a good model. One thing is for sure, getting that right is no doddle!

For more guidance on using and creating appropriately pitched models, inspired by quality texts, explore our Models for Writing booklets available for purchase from one of the HFL Education online resources:

Model for Writing discussion featuring The Great Paper Caper by Oliver Jeffers

Model for Writing recount featuring Traction Man by Mini Grey

Model for Writing recount (newspaper report) featuring Zeraffa Giraffa by Dianne Hofmeyr (illustrated by Jane Ray)

Model for Writing persuasion featuring Weslandia by Paul Fleischman

Model for Writing persuasion featuring The Spider and the Fly by Tony DiTerlizzi (based on the poem by Mary Howittt)